Adventure in the Jungle - another great piece of student creative writing!

Sukitha started lessons with me quite recently, and this is her first completed story.  She is still in primary school, but by working together we improved on her first draft so that there are five different sentence types used in her exciting adventure story! Can you spot them?

In the dark, creepy jungle I was trying to find a jaguar so I could take a picture and send it to my exploring group but before I could look around a jaguar came charging towards me. I was extremely scared and ran off .

"Grrr!"

The sound made me jump.  I took a step backwards which made the jaguar come closer to me . When the jaguar came closer I thought that I should charge to the opposite direction which made the jaguar charge which freaked me out a little but I kept running.

When the jaguar was out of sight, I rested a bit and carried on my adventure in the jungle which was quite hard because the jaguar charged  towards me again, so I ran again.

Luckily , I had a sword and I poked the sword through the jaguar’s chest and he fell to the ground dead.